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== Sunspot Chakram == | == Sunspot Chakram == | ||
| − | <b> Artifact 4 </b> <i> --By BrilliantRain </i> | + | <b> Artifact 4 </b> <i> --By [[BrilliantRain]] </i> |
Acc: Special, Dmg: 6L, Rate: 1, Range 100, Attunement: 15m (orichalcum) | Acc: Special, Dmg: 6L, Rate: 1, Range 100, Attunement: 15m (orichalcum) | ||
| − | As the blinding light of the sun can dazzle people and destroy the unclean, so too does this humble chakram | + | As the blinding light of the sun can dazzle people and destroy the unclean, so too does this humble chakram deceive and destroy. Appearing as a simple chakram of orichalcum that bears a distinct resemblance to the night caste mark, it becomes much, much more when thrown by an attuned user. Once thrown, the chakram bursts into solar flame in a blinding flash of light. Once the flash dies away, it becomes apparent that the air is full of chakrams blazing with the holy power of the sun. |
The user makes one thrown attack at double his usual pool. This attack can be applied to the user's essence in opponents, who may not dodge the attack, but may parry or soak normally. Extra attack successes add to damage as normal. Attacks against creatures of darkness add the user's essence in automatic successes to the attack roll. The user may not use extra action charms or take multiple dice actions in any round that they throw the Sunspot Chakram. | The user makes one thrown attack at double his usual pool. This attack can be applied to the user's essence in opponents, who may not dodge the attack, but may parry or soak normally. Extra attack successes add to damage as normal. Attacks against creatures of darkness add the user's essence in automatic successes to the attack roll. The user may not use extra action charms or take multiple dice actions in any round that they throw the Sunspot Chakram. | ||
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== Comments == | == Comments == | ||
| − | Quibble: When you say, for example, "...kills the user's essence in zombies...", you are making an ambiguous statement between the meanings "...kills a number of zombies equal in number to the user's permanent essence score...", and "...destroys traces of the essence of the user as contained in some (undefined) number of zombies...". I realize that the first is what you meant, but you might consider a little re-wording to make those meanings (I spotted 2 such usages above) less ambiguous. Also, I believe that the more standard term for Exalted is now "to split (your) dice <i>action</i>", rather than "...pool". Otherwise a very good, solid artifact. I haven't evaluated it in terms of power/drawbacks, but it seems fairly well designed. -[[Suzume]] (ps. I also fixed spelling on two words and added a comma. Just letting you know, and feel free to delete this post-script once you've seen it, BrilliantRain.) | + | Quibble: When you say, for example, "...kills the user's essence in zombies...", you are making an ambiguous statement between the meanings "...kills a number of zombies equal in number to the user's permanent essence score...", and "...destroys traces of the essence of the user as contained in some (undefined) number of zombies...". I realize that the first is what you meant, but you might consider a little re-wording to make those meanings (I spotted 2 such usages above) less ambiguous. Also, I believe that the more standard term for Exalted is now "to split (your) dice <i>action</i>", rather than "...pool". Otherwise a very good, solid artifact. I haven't evaluated it in terms of power/drawbacks, but it seems fairly well designed. -[[Suzume]] (ps. I also fixed spelling on two words and added a comma. Just letting you know, and feel free to delete this post-script once you've seen it, [[BrilliantRain]].) |
| − | :That first part was just supposed to be a little bit of flavor text to give the idea of the artifact. And I was wondering how I should put the whole splitting dice pool thing, so thanks for that and the editing. <br> --BrilliantRain | + | :That first part was just supposed to be a little bit of flavor text to give the idea of the artifact. And I was wondering how I should put the whole splitting dice pool thing, so thanks for that and the editing. <br> --[[BrilliantRain]] |
Latest revision as of 01:15, 6 April 2010
Sunspot Chakram
Artifact 4 --By BrilliantRain
Acc: Special, Dmg: 6L, Rate: 1, Range 100, Attunement: 15m (orichalcum)
As the blinding light of the sun can dazzle people and destroy the unclean, so too does this humble chakram deceive and destroy. Appearing as a simple chakram of orichalcum that bears a distinct resemblance to the night caste mark, it becomes much, much more when thrown by an attuned user. Once thrown, the chakram bursts into solar flame in a blinding flash of light. Once the flash dies away, it becomes apparent that the air is full of chakrams blazing with the holy power of the sun.
The user makes one thrown attack at double his usual pool. This attack can be applied to the user's essence in opponents, who may not dodge the attack, but may parry or soak normally. Extra attack successes add to damage as normal. Attacks against creatures of darkness add the user's essence in automatic successes to the attack roll. The user may not use extra action charms or take multiple dice actions in any round that they throw the Sunspot Chakram.
(This artifact was constructed using the Savant & Sorcerer rules. It is a power 4, usefulness 3 artifact that has no drawbacks. I leave decisions on it's game impact and script immunity to individual Players and Storytellers to decide. It was constructed by combining Cascade of Cutting Terror, Shower of Deadly Blades, and Fiery Solar Chakram.)
Comments
Quibble: When you say, for example, "...kills the user's essence in zombies...", you are making an ambiguous statement between the meanings "...kills a number of zombies equal in number to the user's permanent essence score...", and "...destroys traces of the essence of the user as contained in some (undefined) number of zombies...". I realize that the first is what you meant, but you might consider a little re-wording to make those meanings (I spotted 2 such usages above) less ambiguous. Also, I believe that the more standard term for Exalted is now "to split (your) dice action", rather than "...pool". Otherwise a very good, solid artifact. I haven't evaluated it in terms of power/drawbacks, but it seems fairly well designed. -Suzume (ps. I also fixed spelling on two words and added a comma. Just letting you know, and feel free to delete this post-script once you've seen it, BrilliantRain.)
- That first part was just supposed to be a little bit of flavor text to give the idea of the artifact. And I was wondering how I should put the whole splitting dice pool thing, so thanks for that and the editing.
--BrilliantRain
