http://exalted.xi.co.nz/w/index.php?title=CricketAndKestrel/ChapterForum&feed=atom&action=historyCricketAndKestrel/ChapterForum - Revision history2024-03-29T10:29:26ZRevision history for this page on the wikiMediaWiki 1.29.0http://exalted.xi.co.nz/w/index.php?title=CricketAndKestrel/ChapterForum&diff=77814&oldid=prevWordman: Script: fix links messed up in conversion2010-06-08T16:41:52Z<p>Script: fix links messed up in conversion</p>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>My best idea on how to deal with Breath's sudden appearance at the end of last chapter is to get him, Cricket, and Kestrel all together in a room, and then have Cricket start demanding to know what the hell is going on, and why attractive foreign men suddenly seem to be appearing out of nowhere to save her from mysterious perils. No idea how dense the exposition should get at that point, or what her reaction would be. _[[Ikselam]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>My best idea on how to deal with Breath's sudden appearance at the end of last chapter is to get him, Cricket, and Kestrel all together in a room, and then have Cricket start demanding to know what the hell is going on, and why attractive foreign men suddenly seem to be appearing out of nowhere to save her from mysterious perils. No idea how dense the exposition should get at that point, or what her reaction would be. _[[Ikselam]]</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>I was fairly pleased with this chapter. There were nitpicky grammar errors, mainly having to do with a paucity of commas, but I thought the twist at the end was pretty decent. It provides a reason for some plot movement, without seeming totally out of the blue. I'm not keen on the idea of Breath suddenly becoming a good guy, but I think there's room for his actions here to be plenty Machiavellian. _[[Ikselam]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>I was fairly pleased with this chapter. There were nitpicky grammar errors, mainly having to do with a paucity of commas, but I thought the twist at the end was pretty decent. It provides a reason for some plot movement, without seeming totally out of the blue. I'm not keen on the idea of Breath suddenly becoming a good guy, but I think there's room for his actions here to be plenty Machiavellian. _[[Ikselam]]</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== <del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[</del>[[CricketAndKestrel<del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">/ChapterForum</del>/Chapt07<del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </del>| Chapter 7]] ===</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[CricketAndKestrel/Chapt07|Chapter 7]] ===</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>There was a lot of stuff I didn't understand in this chapter. If you have some author's notes, that would be great. --[[dissolvegirl]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>There was a lot of stuff I didn't understand in this chapter. If you have some author's notes, that would be great. --[[dissolvegirl]]</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>:Thank you [[dissolvegirl]]! The truth is, though, there were thought thread I had that just didn't make it to termination that really need to get out of my head in order to make sense. Unfortunately, at the time, I had a massive headache that delayed the posting of that chapter and prevented me from going into as much detail as I'd have wanted to. So, now's my chance to make some sense of it. -- [[SandJack]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>:Thank you [[dissolvegirl]]! The truth is, though, there were thought thread I had that just didn't make it to termination that really need to get out of my head in order to make sense. Unfortunately, at the time, I had a massive headache that delayed the posting of that chapter and prevented me from going into as much detail as I'd have wanted to. So, now's my chance to make some sense of it. -- [[SandJack]]</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>I just signed up to write the next part. I've got some pretty firm ideas of what I want to do, but I'd still like to hear what you had planned, [[CrownedSun]]. Please [mailto:nadrek@lensmen.net email me] the ideas you had but didn't get to use.</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>I just signed up to write the next part. I've got some pretty firm ideas of what I want to do, but I'd still like to hear what you had planned, [[CrownedSun]]. Please [mailto:nadrek@lensmen.net email me] the ideas you had but didn't get to use.</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Question, for the [[CaK]] fans.  This part I'm writing -- it's looking to be pretty long, if I go from "introduce the characters" "set up the conflict" and "resolve the conflict" all in one part.  If I make it as long as it would need to be in that case, especially still developing my Breath/Sauda storyline like I plan, I'm probably going to need to add ANOTHER few days to my deadline.  I'm a long-winded bastard, what can I say;P</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Question, for the [[CaK]] fans.  This part I'm writing -- it's looking to be pretty long, if I go from "introduce the characters" "set up the conflict" and "resolve the conflict" all in one part.  If I make it as long as it would need to be in that case, especially still developing my Breath/Sauda storyline like I plan, I'm probably going to need to add ANOTHER few days to my deadline.  I'm a long-winded bastard, what can I say;P</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>You know, this is a situation where I would not be completely averse to [[CrownedSun]] writing a completion to his own part -- if he feels it is necessery -- for an extended date. It might give you a chance to get some resolution on this chap that you feel halfheartedly about. And don't worry, it is good, gives a lot to work with as others have said, and really opens up the Breath of Heaven storyline that I put in as a kindof throwaway in a way that I find really enticing. But as I said before, I know I've felt about my chapter that it would be great if I had a chance to get some follow through on it, and I don't think it would be completely out of the question to give [[CrownedSun]] the opportunity to have his(her?) followthrough if that's what [[CrownedSun]] really wanted to do. Otherwise, someone else sign up soon! I wrote mine to recently in the past to feel justified taking a chap ;-) --[[SandJack]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>You know, this is a situation where I would not be completely averse to [[CrownedSun]] writing a completion to his own part -- if he feels it is necessery -- for an extended date. It might give you a chance to get some resolution on this chap that you feel halfheartedly about. And don't worry, it is good, gives a lot to work with as others have said, and really opens up the Breath of Heaven storyline that I put in as a kindof throwaway in a way that I find really enticing. But as I said before, I know I've felt about my chapter that it would be great if I had a chance to get some follow through on it, and I don't think it would be completely out of the question to give [[CrownedSun]] the opportunity to have his(her?) followthrough if that's what [[CrownedSun]] really wanted to do. Otherwise, someone else sign up soon! I wrote mine to recently in the past to feel justified taking a chap ;-) --[[SandJack]]</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Yeah, pretty long. I didn't see the sun come up because it's snowing out, but it's there. I'm sure of it. Hopefully this wasn't complete overload, in either the melodramatic sense, the new-character sense, or the "how can I follow this up?" sense. I feel it spiraled slightly out of control near the end there; see "Roger not sleeping." Maybe I'll go back and edit later.  </div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Yeah, pretty long. I didn't see the sun come up because it's snowing out, but it's there. I'm sure of it. Hopefully this wasn't complete overload, in either the melodramatic sense, the new-character sense, or the "how can I follow this up?" sense. I feel it spiraled slightly out of control near the end there; see "Roger not sleeping." Maybe I'll go back and edit later.  </div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Okay, I've signed up to write the second episode. I've got a few ideas, but would love input from others. Where do you think the story should go from here? Are there any particular elements/scenes/characters you think I should include? Does Cricket need someone to save her, or can she take care of herself? Should I actually have a fight scene which occurs in a big grove of flowering cherry trees? Should I make the mysterious assassin a Chosen of Serenity? Is Kestrel dissatisfied with his love life because he's denying the fact that he's gay? Either tell me here, or [mailto:nadrek@lensmen.net email me] if you dig that way-cool conspiratorial vibe.\\</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Okay, I've signed up to write the second episode. I've got a few ideas, but would love input from others. Where do you think the story should go from here? Are there any particular elements/scenes/characters you think I should include? Does Cricket need someone to save her, or can she take care of herself? Should I actually have a fight scene which occurs in a big grove of flowering cherry trees? Should I make the mysterious assassin a Chosen of Serenity? Is Kestrel dissatisfied with his love life because he's denying the fact that he's gay? Either tell me here, or [mailto:nadrek@lensmen.net email me] if you dig that way-cool conspiratorial vibe.\\</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>A nice change of pace. It's good to have a more girly romance/drama story to counterbalance the fighting/adventure/testosterone stuff in the others.</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>A nice change of pace. It's good to have a more girly romance/drama story to counterbalance the fighting/adventure/testosterone stuff in the others.</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>One criticism: You know the word is "Anathema" and not "Anethema," right? I noticed you did this in your <del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[</del>[[CricketAndKestrel<del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">/ChapterForum</del>/PotW004<del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </del>| [[<del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">PotW</del>]] part]] , too.\\</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>One criticism: You know the word is "Anathema" and not "Anethema," right? I noticed you did this in your [[CricketAndKestrel/PotW004|[[<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">PotWPotW</ins>]] part]] , too.\\</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>* [[CricketAndKestrel|Story info]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>* [[CricketAndKestrel|Story info]]</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>*[[WhirlwindBrushMethod|Back to WBM]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>*[[WhirlwindBrushMethod|Back to WBM]]</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>My best idea on how to deal with Breath's sudden appearance at the end of last chapter is to get him, Cricket, and Kestrel all together in a room, and then have Cricket start demanding to know what the hell is going on, and why attractive foreign men suddenly seem to be appearing out of nowhere to save her from mysterious perils. No idea how dense the exposition should get at that point, or what her reaction would be. _[[Ikselam]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>My best idea on how to deal with Breath's sudden appearance at the end of last chapter is to get him, Cricket, and Kestrel all together in a room, and then have Cricket start demanding to know what the hell is going on, and why attractive foreign men suddenly seem to be appearing out of nowhere to save her from mysterious perils. No idea how dense the exposition should get at that point, or what her reaction would be. _[[Ikselam]]</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[/Chapt08 | Chapter 8]] ===</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[CricketAndKestrel/ChapterForum</ins>/Chapt08<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </ins>| Chapter 8]] ===</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>I was fairly pleased with this chapter. There were nitpicky grammar errors, mainly having to do with a paucity of commas, but I thought the twist at the end was pretty decent. It provides a reason for some plot movement, without seeming totally out of the blue. I'm not keen on the idea of Breath suddenly becoming a good guy, but I think there's room for his actions here to be plenty Machiavellian. _[[Ikselam]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>I was fairly pleased with this chapter. There were nitpicky grammar errors, mainly having to do with a paucity of commas, but I thought the twist at the end was pretty decent. It provides a reason for some plot movement, without seeming totally out of the blue. I'm not keen on the idea of Breath suddenly becoming a good guy, but I think there's room for his actions here to be plenty Machiavellian. _[[Ikselam]]</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Peace be with you, --[[SandJack]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Peace be with you, --[[SandJack]]</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[/Chapt07 | Chapter 7]] ===</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[CricketAndKestrel/ChapterForum</ins>/Chapt07<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </ins>| Chapter 7]] ===</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>There was a lot of stuff I didn't understand in this chapter. If you have some author's notes, that would be great. --[[dissolvegirl]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>There was a lot of stuff I didn't understand in this chapter. If you have some author's notes, that would be great. --[[dissolvegirl]]</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>:Thank you [[dissolvegirl]]! The truth is, though, there were thought thread I had that just didn't make it to termination that really need to get out of my head in order to make sense. Unfortunately, at the time, I had a massive headache that delayed the posting of that chapter and prevented me from going into as much detail as I'd have wanted to. So, now's my chance to make some sense of it. -- [[SandJack]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>:Thank you [[dissolvegirl]]! The truth is, though, there were thought thread I had that just didn't make it to termination that really need to get out of my head in order to make sense. Unfortunately, at the time, I had a massive headache that delayed the posting of that chapter and prevented me from going into as much detail as I'd have wanted to. So, now's my chance to make some sense of it. -- [[SandJack]]</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[/Chapt06 | Chapter 6]] ===</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[CricketAndKestrel/ChapterForum</ins>/Chapt06<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </ins>| Chapter 6]] ===</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>I'm really interested to see how people thought the two-part story arc that [[Ikselam]] and I did worked out. It was really interesting to make an already-collaborative project even more collaborative, and it was a heck of a lot of fun.</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>I'm really interested to see how people thought the two-part story arc that [[Ikselam]] and I did worked out. It was really interesting to make an already-collaborative project even more collaborative, and it was a heck of a lot of fun.</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Mort pops in, notices Shoat; she says something <nowiki>creepy/childish</nowiki>, like "You don't belong here." End scene. _[[Ikselam]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Mort pops in, notices Shoat; she says something <nowiki>creepy/childish</nowiki>, like "You don't belong here." End scene. _[[Ikselam]]</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[/Chapt05 | Chapter 5]] ===</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[CricketAndKestrel/ChapterForum</ins>/Chapt05<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </ins>| Chapter 5]] ===</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>I just signed up to write the next part. I've got some pretty firm ideas of what I want to do, but I'd still like to hear what you had planned, [[CrownedSun]]. Please [mailto:nadrek@lensmen.net email me] the ideas you had but didn't get to use.</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>I just signed up to write the next part. I've got some pretty firm ideas of what I want to do, but I'd still like to hear what you had planned, [[CrownedSun]]. Please [mailto:nadrek@lensmen.net email me] the ideas you had but didn't get to use.</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><i>[[SandJack]] tingles in anticipation</i></div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><i>[[SandJack]] tingles in anticipation</i></div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[/Chapt04 | Chapter 4]] ===</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[CricketAndKestrel/ChapterForum</ins>/Chapt04<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </ins>| Chapter 4]] ===</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Question, for the [[CaK]] fans.  This part I'm writing -- it's looking to be pretty long, if I go from "introduce the characters" "set up the conflict" and "resolve the conflict" all in one part.  If I make it as long as it would need to be in that case, especially still developing my <del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[[BreathCricketAndKestrel/ChapterForum</del>/Sauda<del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </del>storyline like I plan, I'm probably going to need to add ANOTHER few days to my deadline.  I'm a long-winded bastard, what can I say;P</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Question, for the [[CaK]] fans.  This part I'm writing -- it's looking to be pretty long, if I go from "introduce the characters" "set up the conflict" and "resolve the conflict" all in one part.  If I make it as long as it would need to be in that case, especially still developing my <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">Breath</ins>/Sauda storyline like I plan, I'm probably going to need to add ANOTHER few days to my deadline.  I'm a long-winded bastard, what can I say;P</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>However, I think this particular part shows a lot of potential for being a "two part resolution" one.  I.e., introduce my wee little villain and set up the situation, then let someone else finish it up in the next part.  Does this sound like a good idea, or should I just bite the bullet and put my nose to the keyboard and write a very long part??\\</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>However, I think this particular part shows a lot of potential for being a "two part resolution" one.  I.e., introduce my wee little villain and set up the situation, then let someone else finish it up in the next part.  Does this sound like a good idea, or should I just bite the bullet and put my nose to the keyboard and write a very long part??\\</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>You know, this is a situation where I would not be completely averse to [[CrownedSun]] writing a completion to his own part -- if he feels it is necessery -- for an extended date. It might give you a chance to get some resolution on this chap that you feel halfheartedly about. And don't worry, it is good, gives a lot to work with as others have said, and really opens up the Breath of Heaven storyline that I put in as a kindof throwaway in a way that I find really enticing. But as I said before, I know I've felt about my chapter that it would be great if I had a chance to get some follow through on it, and I don't think it would be completely out of the question to give [[CrownedSun]] the opportunity to have his(her?) followthrough if that's what [[CrownedSun]] really wanted to do. Otherwise, someone else sign up soon! I wrote mine to recently in the past to feel justified taking a chap ;-) --[[SandJack]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>You know, this is a situation where I would not be completely averse to [[CrownedSun]] writing a completion to his own part -- if he feels it is necessery -- for an extended date. It might give you a chance to get some resolution on this chap that you feel halfheartedly about. And don't worry, it is good, gives a lot to work with as others have said, and really opens up the Breath of Heaven storyline that I put in as a kindof throwaway in a way that I find really enticing. But as I said before, I know I've felt about my chapter that it would be great if I had a chance to get some follow through on it, and I don't think it would be completely out of the question to give [[CrownedSun]] the opportunity to have his(her?) followthrough if that's what [[CrownedSun]] really wanted to do. Otherwise, someone else sign up soon! I wrote mine to recently in the past to feel justified taking a chap ;-) --[[SandJack]]</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Clocking in pretty much halfway between the previous two chapters in wordcount.  </div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Clocking in pretty much halfway between the previous two chapters in wordcount.  </div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[/Chapt02 | Chapter 2]] proper ===</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== [[<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[CricketAndKestrel/ChapterForum</ins>/Chapt02<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </ins>| Chapter 2]] proper ===</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Yeah, pretty long. I didn't see the sun come up because it's snowing out, but it's there. I'm sure of it. Hopefully this wasn't complete overload, in either the melodramatic sense, the new-character sense, or the "how can I follow this up?" sense. I feel it spiraled slightly out of control near the end there; see "Roger not sleeping." Maybe I'll go back and edit later.  </div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Yeah, pretty long. I didn't see the sun come up because it's snowing out, but it's there. I'm sure of it. Hopefully this wasn't complete overload, in either the melodramatic sense, the new-character sense, or the "how can I follow this up?" sense. I feel it spiraled slightly out of control near the end there; see "Roger not sleeping." Maybe I'll go back and edit later.  </div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== soliciting ideas for [[/Chapt02 | chpt 2]] ===</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>=== soliciting ideas for [[<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[CricketAndKestrel/ChapterForum</ins>/Chapt02<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </ins>| chpt 2]] ===</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Okay, I've signed up to write the second episode. I've got a few ideas, but would love input from others. Where do you think the story should go from here? Are there any particular elements/scenes/characters you think I should include? Does Cricket need someone to save her, or can she take care of herself? Should I actually have a fight scene which occurs in a big grove of flowering cherry trees? Should I make the mysterious assassin a Chosen of Serenity? Is Kestrel dissatisfied with his love life because he's denying the fact that he's gay? Either tell me here, or [mailto:nadrek@lensmen.net email me] if you dig that way-cool conspiratorial vibe.\\</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Okay, I've signed up to write the second episode. I've got a few ideas, but would love input from others. Where do you think the story should go from here? Are there any particular elements/scenes/characters you think I should include? Does Cricket need someone to save her, or can she take care of herself? Should I actually have a fight scene which occurs in a big grove of flowering cherry trees? Should I make the mysterious assassin a Chosen of Serenity? Is Kestrel dissatisfied with his love life because he's denying the fact that he's gay? Either tell me here, or [mailto:nadrek@lensmen.net email me] if you dig that way-cool conspiratorial vibe.\\</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>I'm definitely of the mindset that a good romantic story can include a healthy amount of action and ass-kicking, too. :) I tried to hint at something that no one seemed to catch onto in the first chapter.. I'll email you and tell you, in case you feel like building on it further. --[[Dissolvegirl]]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>I'm definitely of the mindset that a good romantic story can include a healthy amount of action and ass-kicking, too. :) I tried to hint at something that no one seemed to catch onto in the first chapter.. I'll email you and tell you, in case you feel like building on it further. --[[Dissolvegirl]]</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>A nice change of pace. It's good to have a more girly romance/drama story to counterbalance the fighting/adventure/testosterone stuff in the others.</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f9f9f9; color: #333333; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #e6e6e6; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>A nice change of pace. It's good to have a more girly romance/drama story to counterbalance the fighting/adventure/testosterone stuff in the others.</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>One criticism: You know the word is "Anathema" and not "Anethema," right? I noticed you did this in your [[/PotW004 | PotW part]] , too.\\</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color:black; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>One criticism: You know the word is "Anathema" and not "Anethema," right? I noticed you did this in your [[<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[CricketAndKestrel/ChapterForum</ins>/PotW004<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </ins>| <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[[</ins>PotW<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </ins>part]] , too.\\</div></td></tr>
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